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Bett, July 9th, 2010, 11:02 am

Page 3~ - Many thanks for all your support guys, you're awesome ;u;!!!
Page 3 *u*!! yep yep! "Undercity" (lol lame name is lame) is of course underground *.*
So yeah, that pink sky is artificial :P

Feel free to point any grammar mistakes >.<!!

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Bett, July 9th, 2010, 12:17 pm

Responses - @kira-sama Many thanks ;u; I'm glad you like it

@otakulys ;u; ohoho well thanks, don't feel bad!! I'm really thankful! ouò
I'll correct all of that then :'D xD

Oh well if it's not a problem I would REALLY apreciate your help with that :'DD!!! Just give me your e-mail or that, via PM or something :DU

Thanks a lot for your help and support :'D!!

@GhostSnap Lol do you think so? ;U; bahaha many thanks!

@Some_unknown_dude Haha muchas gracias :'D
Pues, nop, no cambiare el rosa, el rosa es muy importante para la historia x'D pero me estoy debatiendo en si meter de pronto uno que otro color para enfatizar algunas cosas >x>

@Tomete *u* ohoho~ thanks a lot!

@xLightsOutx Thanks a lot *u*!!! Is such an honor that you think that ;u;!

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I love the way you use the pink, black and white to create your pictures. It creates a nice effect.

posted by kira-sama on July 9th, 2010, 11:23 am





 

Your English isn't horrible! It's actually quite good, there are just some errors here and there. Now I feel kind of bad pointing them out, lol, but I'm glad you appreciated them and didn't feel like I was trying to be rude.

This page has a few mistakes, too, though:

"But they were just looking for power, and they took control of the entire city" (dropping the "the" before control.)

"Now we're trapped down here, and we can't go out without special permission from the mayor" (rather than 'an especial'.)

"They even closed our only gate to the external world saying that it was for "our protection." (You could also say "to protect us, but the first seems to be more of where you were going with that.)

Actually, I get online every day, and if you ever want someone to proof read the lines you're going to be using before you type them in, feel free to e-mail them to me. I've considered offering that sort of help to people on smackjeeves before, since I can't draw myself, haha, so I may as well help other people make their stuff the best it can be. Anyway, just an offer, of course. ^__^

I'm enjoying this comic so far! Keep up the good work!

posted by otakulys on July 9th, 2010, 11:49 am





 

Your style is to die for and the story seems interesting so far. Keep it up!

posted by GhostSnap on July 9th, 2010, 3:29 pm





 

No problem! I'll send you my e-mail in a message through the smackjeeves thing.

posted by otakulys on July 10th, 2010, 4:34 am





 

U-Uwah... So cool -sparkly eyes-

posted by Tomete on July 10th, 2010, 5:28 pm





 

Wow, I love how bold the colors are in this comic! I look forward to seeing where this story goes :D

posted by xLightsOutx on July 10th, 2010, 8:57 pm



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